This week, my group has completed our script. This marks a significant milestone as now we have the most important foundation to further build up for out storyboard and shot list. With all the dialogue in place, we can start focusing on how we want our shots to look like. Which makes this step way better than before. As a director, I want to ensure that the dialogue perfect fits for what goes on in the scene. I also gathered ideas from my other member so that we both have the ideas of what the dialogue will be about.
Although our dialogue is pretty much solidified, I want to revisit the script with my group to add some notes on possible improvements. For example, one of the first scenes is Tanek facing two guards. This scene makes it where Tanek passes through two guards by the use of giving candy to them. The guards act calmly that a stranger is going up to them. And the quick grab from the pocket doesn't bring danger to the guards. But I feel the dialogue of the guards did not fit the situation and reaction of the takeout of candy. Normal people would think that the agent would quickly take out a weapon in this situation, I want to convey that reaction into the guards. This would make it a more natural reaction, especially for those who work for outcasts.
To make improvements in this part. Instead of "You, what your business here", we can put more natural reaction and say "Hey, who are you?". This would help give more mystery of the character with the sunglasses. Because Tanek doesn't talk at all in this scene, we need a response relating to the lack of talking. The guards will be blocking Tanek's way, by being side to side each other.
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